I had to write this essay on global warming for my reading class? im only 13?

Question

please tell me what you think of it... i wrote it in a couple of minutes its due tomorrow =*( please tell me what you think

Global Warming: Myth or Mayhem?

1997: hikers find 100’s of baby seals dying of starvation. Why? Waters are slowly warming. Fish and wildlife have and are dying, meaning there is no food for the seals. Now, what is causing this? Global warming is your answer.

Global warming, or climate changes, is caused by MANY things. Some, natural, some caused by us, the humans of the earth. The green house gasses and carbon dioxide, both man and nature made, get caught in earths atmosphere. Then, the gasses block heat from leaving earth, thus, slowly heating the earth’s heat.

The earth’s temperature has already risen. 1.8-6.3 degrees a year. Melting the ice caps, endangering the polar bears even more, and putting us pretty much under water. With the sea levels rising, some places will be under water, and some of horrible droughts. In Antarctica with it warming, the

Answer 1

It is very good.

Answer 2

it gives off very distencted detail,and your grabber is stupidus, i would call it an A+

Answer 3

You have done very well for a 13 year old. Excellent grammar. And I enjoyed reading it.

If you want me to help you more email right away so that I will wait up for your email.

If you want an A+ you will have one.

First reorganize you paper a little. Put that you believe in global warming with three reason why in the first paragraph. Then make three paragraphs that say each of the 3 reasons that you believe it in a separate paragraph.

Then in your closing paragraph Say your three reasons in a different way. Then email me your reorganized, and much more convincing paper, and I will see if there is anything else that makes it better.

Don't for get to email if you want me to review your final paper, because I will got to bed soon.

I think you git an OK grade with what you have done.

Answer 4

try to extend it. talk about global warming reference in the media, what we can do, and other effects global warming has

Answer 5

Global warming is a load of c**p and has been hijacked by politicians and the media to scare people and make money. And your school has been sucked right into it making you write an essay on it.

Answer 6

Well i disagree. For a 13yr old, that is alot of researching and writing to do for an essay. I had to write an essay on Global warming earlier on in the semester for my Phy Sci102 class. You will be well prepared. Basically Global Warming defers regular weather patterns. Like during this time of yea, where it would normally be sunny and hot in NY, there would probably be snow storms, and cold weather conditions. It'd be sweltering hot around the cool points. So chin up, you've got the essay under control! Hope I helped!

~*WinglessAngel*~

Answer 7

kind of short for an essay

Answer 8

I would have to agree...it is awfully short for an essay. What are the guidelines your teacher has given? You do have some grammatical errors that needed to be corrected; I would suggest that you read it out loud to a parent or just to yourself so you can get an better understanding of what it "sounds" like.

This really helps with regard to grammatical errors and just finding your overall "voice" in a written paper.

It also seems rushed...any chance you put this one off until last minute? Believe me...all students do it (even college students) so I'm trying to make you feel bad...just curious; teachers can tell if you've procrastinated.