I have a new poem. please tell me what you think!?

Question

“Feeling”

Brittany Evanko

Feeling as if I am in a perfect place, yet so lost,

Not knowing what your love will ultimately cost.

I feel as if I have everything in the palm of my hand.

Little does anyone know, my brain is scattered like sand.

I don’t know what I am looking for, yet I am so lost.

I would have never guessed our paths would cross.

So now I reach out for your hand, with my eyes wide shut.

Going with that small feeling, I am too afraid to ask what.

I want someone to believe in me and see through my eyes;

To put everything out on my sleeve, having no disguise.

Answer 1

I really like your poem! its great, the only thing i dont get is the first line of the second stanza...if you don't know what you are looking for of course you are lost... the "yet" doesn't quite fit.

I give it an 8 out of 10

<3

~an average girl

Answer 2

i really like it but the part "with my eyes wide shut" thats the only part i think u should change. other then tht i LOVE it!!! 9 out of 10!!! good job!

Answer 3

You have done well!

simple yet bold.

keep up the good work!!

Answer 4

WOW!!!!!! That was amazing did you really write that it's a lot better than mine! That was like the best poem ever it was filled with details and i like those words in there it is amazing.I think its wonderful if you think its not good no worries it very good.

Answer 5

i loved it it is beautiful