I have a poem i wrote dont know if i should send it to my publisher read inside.?

Question

Calling

I hear you insistent whispers

While I take my evening stroll

I turn to see nothing their

Quiet scared I feel you presence

Pulling my existence towards yourself

I know who you are

The wind who whispers my name

Asks me to become like you

I try to run

Faster and faster

You keep you pace

Knowing I will stop

I give in

I feel myself fading

Becoming thin

Disappearing

Wondering why

My fate is so twisted

yea i am 13 and i need feed back i want to know if i should get it published with the rest of my poetry... thanks a bunch : D

Answer 1

Hard to believe you are only 13 and writing like this. Of course you should publish...it is beautiful. Get someone to help you with spelling, then submit your work. You are on your way!

Answer 2

you have a couple mispellings but other than that a total yes!!!!

Answer 3

Like others said, there are typos and missing commas. I like it, but for some reason it feels empty. BTW, their should be there in the third line.

Read my poem?

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Answer 4

That is okay .....you just need to add in some comas.

Answer 5

Nice attempt......great going, u need to make certain changes, like 'You Keep U pace' does not go with the flow. Rest good, go ahead for publishing. Good luck!

Answer 6

How some people get published... it really boggles the mind.

This is really cliche. And... I don't even know what to say about the grammar. Really, just... stop. Please.

Answer 7

Wow dats amazin I wish I could write poetry like that

Answer 8

im 13 too and this isss the best poem i have ever heard if i were to rate it from 1-10 i woild say a million. if you send this in you will getr a lot of money and fame

aaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwweeeeeeeeeeess...

Answer 9

I THINK IT'S AWESOME!

YOU SHOULD SEND IT!   GO FOR IT!

=)

Answer 10

omg that is so good!!!

i swear

even though im not one if those poetry poeple!!

Answer 11

yeah. add a few commas and spell check some words. perhaps it will be acceptable. But hey you're 13.You just keep working with it, send it in and hop for the best . if not. still cool. try aging. ask for advice. so go for it. you'll never know unless you take that chance. I'm 16 and i write poetry. about the streets and love and life. people say my poems are great but  i don't know how or where to publish them.just try your luck.