I have posted this one a few times. It is finally going in a book. Is this a good story?

Question

LITTLE GREEN VINE

Hi, I’m, a little green vine,

I want to find, a fence to climb,

I want to grow, twelve feet long,

Careful not to touch the lawn,

Spring, Seeds, the start of me,

I think I’ll go, climb that tree,

On my tips, buds will grow,

I'll put on a flower show,

Here she comes, water can,

Sunshine Lady’s, garden plan,

She likes me, her little green vine,

I dance in the wind in the summertime,

Hi…I’m…a little green vine,

Twisting, running trailing kind,

Black Eyed Susan and Sweet Pea,

They cannot keep up with me,

Watermelon’s big and slow,

Pumpkin vine has time to go,

And the Morning Glory’s blue,

Can’t grow as fast as you-know-who,

So…I’m…off to climb,

A trestle or a bench this time,

She likes me, her little green vine,

I’m here and there and all entwined,

Answer 1

This is quite interesting.  I kept thinking the lady was going to pull out the green vine because it was a weed.  Glad I was wrong.

Excellent work.  We should all go over to poets of mars.com and buy your books!

T.

Answer 2

Wow that was done beautifully!! I loved the rhyming and the flow, it was like sing-song and it didn't mess up at any part and start to sound different!! really awesome job!

I'm glad I had a chance to read it=)

Answer 3

I was getting a bit worried there....this little green plant seemed a might too cocky for me....I was expecting to find at the end that his owner simply ripped him down and dug him out.  Phew, thank goodness for that.

Answer 4

Lovely as is.

I thought you might pull a twist and end up with poison Ivy.

Kudos!

Answer 5

Makes for a great Sing-a-Long

No Vine Will Be Served Before It's Time

Answer 6

I want to buy that book!  I have such a brown thumb I can kill silk flowers.  Sunshine Lady..wonderful.

Answer 7

I don't know the book, but this vine is good.

Answer 8

Ah yes, I remeber this one...The "made up" vine that no real vine can compete with...

I'm partial to the nature poems. (Ya think?)

Answer 9

you cant imagine how much

i absolutely love it!

Answer 10

Wonderful!!!!

nfd♥

Answer 11

Wild grape or Bitter sweet?

either way this is delightful!

think it is more than appropriate to give them a voice.  I can visualize a huge glossy accordion book illustrated with lovely bugs and babies and blooms !  good job!

Answer 12

Yes. This to answer all your questions at once.

You silly, kind person!

Answer 13

REPORTED for rhyming

click click click

Folks please stay in your houses, this rhyme-vine is dangerous.

Answer 14

I thought of Jack's Beanstalk climbing into the sky.

Answer 15

Hey you ... I DO hope so.

Answer 16

oh!!yeah children will love reading this at school...and how they will imagine the looks of you...perhaps if you really have some good illustrators that will go with this...truly i will buy your book....just to let the children hear...and let the children imagine...your the best.....good luck....

Answer 17

This has a nice bouncy meter to it. Nice feeling. With the antics of the little green vine - it presents a pleasurable read. ♥

Answer 18

"Autumn speckle covered wall"--stunning! A visual flower show that could easily be made into a video, speeding up the time sequence.  That video is in my head right now.

Answer 19

What kind of a book is it going into?

Answer 20

Those who can find a first person view of a vine's life interesting, will think this is a great poem.

I for one enjoyed your rhyming scheme. I am sure children would love to read this, and have it read to them. I don't really know how you did it, but this rhyme reads as if written by a little kid - who thinks himself a vine. That's pretty startling.