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by Guest60447  |  earlier

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i just wrote this this afternoon....hope u like the TWIST

"a DREAded afTernOoN nAp"

wandering a field, my strength was half dead

so there lie a tree to resy my weary head

along the past of deepest sleep

came colors of red, blue, yellow and green

first appeared in a colorful blur

dull as the night clouds covered the earth

as blue tried to rise and green sat below

red in the sky turned to merlot

the sun fell far from the bright yellow rays

completing the cycle of one other day

as focused as all the beauty had seemed

one blurry spot seemed to be haunting to me

the figured outlined approached with a song

her hair had the breeze singing along

with dirth on her gown and all over her face

i quickly ran to offer my aid

the closer i got, the better i knew

there was blood on her face and down to her shoe

collapsing head-first i feared she had died

so i lifted her up from where she had lied

a whisper came forth from her ruby red lips

that said "i killed the man that tried to do this"

i brushed back her hair out of her eyes

her gaze me see the and slowly realize

the green in her iris made me believe

the one she had killed was really set free

i asked his description to be clear as can be

she said "the man who i killed is holding me"

aaron ray cochran

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  1. very interesting and creepy. I like how it flows.  It's very good!


  2. ... or go to fanfiction.net

    this is a q&a self help site, not a writing site.

  3. thats good!

  4. Awesome. You should join Writerscafe.org

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