I jsut wrote this and i know?

Question

it needs work but can you tell me wat u think? idk wat to do with the ending=/

she hates herself more than she can describe

she feels so twisted inside

she needs more help than anyone can provide

she looks in the morrior and it aint her she rly seein

why cant she act like wat she rly feelin

everyday before she goes to sleep she wishes to die

maybe one day her wish will be fufilled

but until then she'll just abide and remain with blood spilled

represetnin wat she cant express

her only solution to opress//the hurt//

she feels is to stuff every problem she ever dealt wit

til her final day when everything she feels will simply become something she felt

never again to be dealt wit

Answer 1

I'm into rap and i gotta tell you with the right beat that would be awesome. Nice rhyming, its gotta a rhythm to it.

Answer 2

i really like it...its so strong and meaningful.

Answer 3

rap is for people who have no talent. if you cant sing you rap. if your not that great of a poet you rap. thats why theres so many of em lol.

Answer 4

i think its pretty cool uhh sounds like it could be a rap song

Answer 5

wow very deep its kind of depressing but okay