I just wrote this poem.. Feedback, suggestions?

Question

I wrote this about 10 minutes ago. Me and one of my best friends have been parting, so I wrote this. Tell me what you think please. And what I could do to improve..

He's been there for me,

ever since the start,

through the good and bad,

and we swore we'd never part.

I've been there for him,

done all that I could do,

but he he keeps this up,

we're close to being through.

Our friendships' being tested,

to see how much longer we'll go,

we're treating this like a game,

but not like it was a while ago.

Everything is changing,

nothing is the same,

our promise has been broken,

and we are both to blame.

Answer 1

You asked for criticism, so I hesitantly offer my advice. The only thing I have to say is that the third stanza sounds a little wooden, a bit oddly worded. It's hardly my place to tell you to rework it, but if I were to be writing the aforementioned poem, I think I would choose some words that sounded a bit smoother there. However, I love the fourth and final stanza! Very nice! Very...."blaming". I like it. Nice poem.

Answer 2

i like it ill give you a star.

Answer 3

Good work

keep it up.

Answer 4

Nice!