I just wrote this poem...will you tell me what you think?

Question

I wrote this poem a few minutes ago and would like some feed back please. I am not sure if I should *** another verse or leave it as is. And I would be very greatful If any one could come up with a good title. Thank you in advance!

Watching me…devouring the light….utter chaos in her path

I feel her presence…I try to leave…but she grips me in her hands

“All the kingdoms of the world I give to thee if only you will take my hand.”

I must run…seek the light…my vision starts to blur.

Darkness encases my body and she sweetly coos my name.

“No matter what you do or where you go with me you will always stay.”

Do not listen…block her out…I run with all my might.

She screams my name as I shatter my darkness with my light.

Blooded hands and a broken mirror are all I have left to show.

Answer 1

Deffinitly deep and emotional. I liked it very much, love.

Answer 2

good... its diffrent and kind of scary... i like it!

Answer 3

i love poetry and this poem was amazing  u r a really good poet it took me a while to understan dalthough ive finally figured it out. but im sorry i failed too come up with a good tittle fir this poem