I <3 writing?

Question

and I cant sleep

so I wrote this :)

tell me whatcha think please

I don’t want to close my eyes

And imagine I’m here with you

Sure it hurts a lot less

But it’s just a false pretense

Keeping my eyes open

Keeps my mind shut

And closing my mind

Keeps me out of this rut

Insomnia is the best way

To face the facts

That I can’t just sleep away

Answer 1

Talented! Also, verry veryy true. Keep up the good work. When you write a book or publish a poem I will be the first to read it! :]

Answer 2

It has a longing feeling without being overly sad. Great!

Answer 3

Insomnia is a condition, not a solution.You will love again and you will sleep again, it all takes time.For the moment keep writing and turn and face your devils.Eyes open, mind open and let the sunshine in, and keep writing as you continue your voyage, of discovering yourself.

I could of course be wrong, but I was feeling particularly sage today as I didn&#039;t sleep much last night !

Answer 4

It&#039;s good, but I didn&#039;t really understand the poem. Anyways, it&#039;s good. You just need to work a little on the rhyming, but after that its good. You have a talent! Keep up the good work. I&#039;m just 14, so I feel a little akward giving this kind of advice to people who might be older. But please take this in consideration.

And eventhough they have all been answered, it would be nice if you checked on my poems. :)

Hopefully I helped.

Answer 5

It&#039;s very emotional. Nice.