I made a few changes....is this better? Or have I missed the bus?

Question

My Panama Hat

By Jonni F.

I love to wear a panama

a panama upon my head.

Upon my head of spiky hair,

spiky hair that I hold so dear.

So dear to me, this hat of straw,

of straw, or hemp, jute and clover.

And clover, sweetest sign of spring.

spring in my step, I want to sing!

To sing a song about a hat,

a hat to me that just seems right .

Seems right to me, my panama,

my panama and me - a sight!

Answer 1

I thing some people will like and some wont  

Answer 2

Sweet!!! :-)

Its amazing you are very talented!!!

I think you did a good job!!!

Keep Writing

Hope I helped!!

- ♥ Taylor ♥

Answer 3

Better. You should capitalize Panama...I was trying to figure out what a pa-nama is...

Answer 4

Much improvement...I myself prefer large brimmed sun hats with trailing ribbons, it's a southern thing, I guess...