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I need a poem about my last day in the summer for my highschool english class... is this any good?

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Lazy Last Day

612…613…614

The hammock sways up and back

up and back

616…617…618 up and back.

Time has run away, and is nowhere to be found.

I am nothing more than a breathing grandfather clock lazily reclining

in my swinging seat that

I swear once belonged to the Lazy Boy himself…

whoever that was.

It’s been drizzling for the past 500 or so up and backs of the hammock,

I love it.

It’s like God set the clouds on mist.

The clouds dance around the descending sun;

they begin to cover it like a silky purple sheet

covers a magician’s hat right before he

pulls out Peter Rabbit.

The piercing sent of a barbecue starts to envelope my nose

and wet my mouth.

I lift my head up for the first time in what

I would guess was 800 or so up swings of the hammock… but one can never be sure.

The neighbors are cooking, they’re always cooking.

It’s nothing but a big tease really,

I become cursed like the pizza boy,

who’s able to smell the delicious combination of cheese, sauce, bread, and grease... but never able to taste it.

I close my eyes and start to think about Senior year, but

for now I hold onto the waning daylight in

the last day of summer.

994…995…996…

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  1. yes it is good


  2. I like it alot!! =) its really good how you described everything. The whole poem is really good. =)  

  3. I actually really like it! The only change I would make is changing the 'up and backs' to 'back and forths', but that's just me. Good Luck!

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