I need help, I am german!?

Question

Is that correct?

Dear Peter,

Three months ago, while I was on holiday in spain I bought a new book “Bend it like Beckham”. The book is about Jeminder Bhamra a daughter with Indian family who lives in Britain. Jesminder plays football against her mother’s permission.

The Indian family is preparing Pinky´s wedding, the sister of Jess.

Jessminder plays football in the park with her friends. She gets to know Jules a white Briton.

Jules persuades Jess to join a woman´s football-team

Jess becomes an important person for this team and falls in love in her trainer.

Just before an important final match, which is on played on her sister´s wedding-day, jessie has to decide whether she wants to play football or go to her sister´s wedding.

Jess father knows how sad his daughter is, he decides to help her.

It is an interesting book. Exact for a football freak like me. Write back!

In love, Peter

This is for the school in Germany!

Answer 1

Dear Peter,

Three months ago, while I was on holiday in Spain I bought a new book “Bend it like Beckham”. The book is about Jeminder Bhamra, the daughter of an Indian family who lives in Britain. Jesminder plays football against her mother’s permission.

The Indian family is preparing Pinky´s wedding, who is the sister of Jess.

Jessminder plays football in the park with her friend and gets to know Jules, a white Briton.

Jules persuades Jess to join a woman´s football team

Jess becomes an important person for this team and falls in love with her trainer.

Just before an important final match, which is played on her sister´s wedding-day, Jessie has to decide whether she wants to play football or go to her sister´s wedding.

Jess' father knows how sad his daughter is, so he decides to help her.

It is an interesting book, made for a football freak like me. Write back!

In love, Peter

Made some corrections i think are right.

Viel Gluck

Answer 2

Hey, mein Vorname ist auch Peter.

The letter is fine as it is, but if you want some suggestions on how to perfect it:

+ Is [this] correct?

+ The "s" in Spain needs to be capitalized.

+ Bamra needs a comma after it.

+ You have spelled her name many different ways.

+ She would play football with her mother's permission, but it's against her wishes.

+ The family is preparing for the wedding of Jess's sister Pinky.

+ Comma after Jules.

+ Football team doesn't require a hyphen.

+ Wedding day doesn't require a hyphen.

+ "Jess's father know how sad his daughter is, so he decides to help her.

+ "Just right" for a football freak like me.

+ Love, Peter

Is this letter being written by Peter to Peter?

Answer 3

Warum nimst du hilfe? Was ist los?

Answer 4

yeah, sounds right. I saw the movie.