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how do i take this paragraph

One more main cause of water pollution is the presence of excessive nutrients in the water. Nitrogen and phosphorous compounds that generally come from sewage, fertilizers, and animal manure are good food sources of algae. Excess nutrients in water also result to excessive growth of algae that deprive aquatic plants and animals adequate levels of oxygen to survive. Because of this many aquatic organisms die and decay which aggravates the problem.

and make it seem less smarter like change the BIG words? Haha

Answer 1

I'm not telling you. That's plagiarism. You need to do your own work, or you'll fail in life. By the way, your teacher will be able to know if you plagiarized something. If you do really well on a paper, but then fail the test because you really didn't do it and learn it, that's a big uh-oh for you. Oh, by the way, he or she will be able to know right away if something is plagiarized, and he or she will give you a zero on the paper, and possibly worse punishment to go along with it.

Fidget: You're an English teacher, yet you're helping a student plagiarize their work? No wonder a lot of parents blame the school system for the problems with their kids.

Another edit: I don't care if you're in middle school, high school, or kindergarten. Your teacher said get it from the internet, but he didn't mean copying every word and just "changing the big words". That is still plagiarism, and it's against every school's code of conduct. It goes unsaid, you do not copy someone else's work, it's cheating. If you do not think so, ask your teacher. You're supposed to read it and write it in your own words, not copy it almost word for word and just change a few of them around. That's still copying. If the author found out about that, they could take legal action for it, because they're work is not being credited to them, it's being credited to you. It's illegal to do what you're trying to do.

Answer 2

Another main cause...

...come from sewage, fertilisers and animal manure... (no comma before "and")

...are good food sources for algae.

....result in excessive growth....

...plants and animals of adequate levels...

...to survive. As a result of this many organisms die and decay, thus aggravating the problem. (you can't start a sentence with "because").

The big words don't need changing, they're fine.

Answer 3

Excessive nutrients in water may at first seem good but extra nutrients in water actuallly deprive water plants and water animals because these nutrients cut back on the oxygen the animals need to survive.  Excessive nutrients come from fertilizers people use for farming or gardening and even to control sewage problems  Such fertilizers are actually a main source of water polllution.

Answer 4

Another reason why we have water pollution is because of the extra nutrients in the water. Nitrogen and phosphorous compounds that usually come from sewage, fertilizers, and animal manure are all items algae feeds upon. The extra nutrients in the water also cause the algae growth larger. This removes the necessary, equal amount of oxygen that underwater plants and animals need to survive.

Because of this problem these animals and plants die, and decay which makes the pollution heavier.  

Answer 5

Too many nutrients can be a source of water pollution.

Dark waters from sewers,  manure and fertilizers washed away from fields contain chemicals (called Nitrogen and Phosphorous) that are  a food for algae and other aquatic plants.

Thus, Algae have too much food and grow uncontrolled stealing oxygen from other plants, fish and animals. Some fish, small animals, aquatic plants will die for lack of oxygen.

Their dead bodies  will then rotten, increasing further the pollution of the water