I need writers to give me feedback on my very short works?

Question

Anybody who knows or loves anything about writing, please help. I simply need feedback on my writings. They are very short, and just reading one would mean the world to me. And if its not to much to ask please leave a comment on the page.

THANK YOU! THANK YOU!

Here you go:

http://incoherentlyspeaking.blogspot.com/

Also if you want, comment on graphics and the looks of the website!

*I want you to be truthful.So i expect some negative feedback, but please if you are going to tell me its bad, tell me how I can make it better.

Answer 1

Incoherent: You are writing poetry in prose format. I suggest you use the traditional format to make it more accessable, or something in between, playing with mixing the formats.

Don't let your spelling or grammar be weak unless you use your weaknesses to conscious effect, which can turn them to strengths; into style. But if it's not conscious, it's just sloppy writing.