I really need help with this poem...?

Question

I really need more lines and I can't think of more things to write. The poem is about a beautiful land and I'm trying to describe it. Suggestions would be great also! Thanks!

There was once a land, fair and true.

The sky clear and a beautiful blue.

With rivers flowing day and night,

It was always such a beautiful sight.

Colorful birds fly all around,

Overwhelming your ears with melodious sounds.

Every mountain towering toward the sky,

Touching the clouds...up so high.

A rainbow shines in every corner,

Bringing in a neighboring foreinger.

Answer 1

One good technique to use in a poem is to shift the focus. If you start out with a sweeping view (like you've done) narrow it down and talk about something, or someone, specific. Focus on one of the birds, for instance--where is it going? What color is it, exactly? Who else is watching it fly? If it flies to its nest on a building (let's say), what else is happening inside the building?

Answer 2

wow im sorry i cant help you but i think that is a really beautiful poem

Answer 3

but this land has come and past,

the true beauty could not last.

if only we thought of what was once then,

maybe we could see it once again.

Answer 4

Shadows do not dare to show,

Hiding from ten suns' golden glows.

Deep, cool forests, lush and green,

Dew-covered leaves with a silvery sheen.

Flowers bloom daily, yellow and pink,

And many more colors than you can think.

Peace can be found in the crystal coves,

Down by the sea and the sycamore grove.

The ocean's waters are sweet, clean and soft,

It's cradling waves will hold you aloft.

They roll onto beaches of pure, white sand,

Small and smooth, it slides through your hand.

The fruits and berries that collect in the grass

Are sweeter than love and brighter than brass.

At night, all the stars are assigned to some part

Of this beautiful landscape, this fine work of art.

They really are angels, watching over the land,

You'll find evidence of that from "snow angels" in the sand.

Untouched and unseen and unheard of by man,

To keep this place hidden, we'll do all that we can.

We inhabitants of this heaven will protect with our lives,

So please help our wonderful home to survive.

:). Nice poem you might, beautiful imagery.

Hope this helped.

Answer 5

Your poem is beautiful already.

A cloud passes over head

leaving not a single path untread.

Creating the perfect scenery

it's like the old town greenery

A visit dialy is not enough

because it's not the same as the real stuff

Ehh, it's kinda rough but for on the spot I kinda like it. I hope it gives you ideas.