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The pie chart shows details regardlng the proportion of firwork accidents in Australia in 1995 and 2000 respectively.

According to the locations and reasons of the frieworks accidents,the pie chart tall into 4 categories .consistent with the data recorded in 1995, half of the Firwork accidents happened at public places,compared with 20% happening at family parties,the remaining part was evenly divided by 2 reasons :At public celebrations and when Teens play alone.

Let’s look at the situation of fireworks accidents recorded in 2000,It can be clearly seen that accidents occuring at public displays fell to 30%,while family parties became the most dangeous place with a figure of 50% ,which was 2.5 times more than the number in p995,In terms of the other two factors ,the percentage of the accidents caused by teens playing alone remained the same, registering a number of 15%,while the accidents caused at pub celebrations redued by 10% than that in 1995(5%)

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  1. The pie chart shows details regarding the proportion of fireworks accidents in Australia in 1995 and 2000 respectively.

    According to the locations and reasons of the fireworks accidents, the pie chart falls into four categories. Consistent with the data recorded in 1995, half of the fireworks accidents happened at public places, compared with 20% happening at family parties, the remaining part was evenly divided by 2 reasons: at public celebrations and when teens play alone.

    Let’s look at the situation of fireworks accidents recorded in 2000. It can be seen clearly that accidents occurring at public displays fell to 30%, while family parties became the most dangerous place with a figure of 50%, which was 2.5 times more than the number in 1995. In terms of the other two factors, the percentage of the accidents caused by teens playing alone remained the same, registering a number of 15%, while the accidents caused at pub celebrations reduced by 10% compared to 1995(5%).

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