I really need your kind help!Could you help me to polish my composition?

Question

I'm an English learner.this is a composition I wrote according to a picture.Just help me to revise my mistakes and structures~thank you so much!

The graphic information presented in the line chart retlects the typical daily demand for electricity in England during both summer and Winter.The accompaning pie chart indicates an average household use of electricity in England.

Corsistent with the data in the line chart the usage of eletricity fluctuates in a typical day with the demand for electricity in winter surpassing that of in summer .during a certain day in summer,people use fewer electricity (12000units)from 3AM-9AM than that after 9,hoverig aroud 15000 vnites of electricity .In winter there are two periods of high demahd fom electricty,from18-23AM and from 2-5AM respectively.

According the information in second pie chart, a staggaing 52.5% of the electricity is used for heating ,The other half of electricity is almost used for 3 sectors :ovens, kettles and washing. the first seetion consumes a little bit higher of 17.5% while the rest two have an equal share of 15%

Answer 1

in the 3rd paragraph: consist...you put an r in place of the n

in the 3rd paragraph i would put a comma between the words: "chart" and "the"

capitalize the D of During in the 3rd paragraph

instead of the word fewer i would just put in "less" in the 3rd paragrpah

*hovering in 3rd para.

demand in 3rd

in the 4th: According TO the information....you just skipped a word!

*stagaring...i think thats who you spell it? double check in the dictionary or on microsoft word

in the 4th paragraph, replace the comma after the word "heating" for a peroid.

instead of the numeral 3, id write "three" only use actual numbers if youre talking about percentages or times

make sure you put a peroid on the end of the last word of the 4th paragraph!

overlll, very well written jsut a few mechanical errors