I seldom do this, but I'd like some feedback on my short story.?

Question

This is a short WWII story I wrote half for pure practice, developing my more postmodern style, but I ended up liking it. Summary: a soldier and a nurse, rather in love, dessert from the war to be together, and must flee across the english channel during a storm.

There's also quite a bit of Gibson, Pynchon, and Hemingway references that I never bothered to rewrite, so see if you can catch them.

Thanks for reading. Lemme know what you think.

Link: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Selentic/298997/

Answer 1

Yes, wow, this is amazing. I appreciate the style and tone along with your vast vocabulary than most find just out of their reach. Nice little character peice. Bravo!

The only thing I could say is that I believe you missed a word here or there, so you might want to double-check that. Do keep writing.