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Question

"Sidewalks"

my ringing ears

my singing legs

dance together

to night songs

on sidewalks

no one speaks to me walking

talking with the muffled voice

i hear inside

thick heels and skull

echo passed the cracks

paths trapped by moonlight

approach the idea of home

unlock the front door

find out on the other side

again this farewell city

will welcome morning best

through the waking window panes.

Answer 1

sweet.

Answer 2

I doubt this is what you were going for.....

but - everyone gets a different twist, bend....

let me start with

WOW!!

I am again blown away

the imagery meeting such opposites

melding them together as though meant to walk hand in hand

in a surrealistic twist to an unrealistic, simplistic,very real end

thru my eyes... this is what I read --

body and mind not on same planes... level

the ears are ringing and

the muffled voice heard - inside

heels and skull echo

and the light is trapped

legs up beat... form a partner with song and

dance to the night.... alive.. almost happy

the guarded idea of home, of peace..heart even... still tucked and locked away... and approaching, gaining entry... goal..

safety is away from the day and the masses

in this good bye city....

life in the panes... waking them....and the day is greeted from the other side of them.... it looks better from within...

--- apologies if I am outta line ---

for the way I took your words and reformed them..... I would like very much to know your view, thoughts and feelings on your words..... not the if it is good or bad.... just what you wanted/hoped we would get....

for me..... the feelings brought out... were of weariness, tired heart.... wanting the comfort, solice a haven....  to face another day in a cold city..... wanting to dance, live.... freely... and feeling unable to.... looking, hoping in the end retreating... not resigned... not defeated... not as much fight though....

you have a wonderful gift

to bring together pieces shards.... into this great kallidescope of a view.... and as I said earlier.... each of us, readers, will always see a different view of how it relates... or touches.... so if what I have seen - in your words - are outta line, or no where near what it is you had in mind when you began; I just hope I do not offend you....

and -- I think?-- another answer eluded to the "step on a crack break your mother's back" -- that saying?

yes, that came to mind here as well... awesome... carefully we pick our way thru the hurt of heart and mind, the fun we have at times to find home - almost so weary sounds as a fairy tale - that  elusive place.. where safely, happily we can enjoy a sunrise, face day.... and the slings, arrows - grace of it.... the reality, surreal combining the physical, emotional... spiritual... again... wow.... wow... can't wait to read more of your words....

-- would like to thank you --

for the very kind words at another of your questions

never stop writing -- regardless of what anyone ever has or may in the future say

we write because we must... some -- you!!-- just do it better than all of us...

I am glad I was able to assist - and give support -

in other questions of yours...

and hope I am able to do so again

have a great day!  

thank you for taking the time to read this

;)

Answer 3

hey i love it!!!! i walk alot....  wicked good...maybe instead of me counting steps ill  think of a poem to...you did a great job