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Dear my friend

We have seen it suffer.

We have seen smile.

Or not I see you more.,

I promise you that,

if the 'soul reincarnates,

you I'll recognize eyes.

If there is a paradise,

there I'll find you.

If there is only the end,

I'll keep your memory,

up to my end.

Answer 1

You made me learn that  ::I am strong

thanks

Answer 2

Commas after periods? Ok, that's a new one on me! The words are great, but your timing is way off even for this style. Dear My Friend? I'm lost. What have you seen suffer? Or not I see you more? It's incomplete in thought and vocabulary! You as a poet have a great responsibility to feed and nourish our thoughts with imagination and you will do a lot better on the next one I'm sure of it! Taking my criticism or not, you must open your mind in a great distance from where there is no return and then you will give us all a masterpiece deserving of your name. "I Want To Comment On This Poem??" Or do you want others to comment? I'll keep your memory up to my end? What does that mean? I just hope you got caught up in rushing your work and tripped upon too many typos... My counter...

My Dear Friend,

We all have seen suffering

We all have seen a smile

The things we've seen before

Will start off with a promise

The soul shall reincarnate you

To awaken tired eyes

In this long walk I will find you

In some distant paradise

Where the road must end

I'll keep you in my memories

Up to the very end

My dearest friend

This I promise.

You need thoughts to flow freely. Don't just write words, build journeys for us to travel on smoothly. Please don't be mad because critics are there to do one thing... Make you better. I hope I have helped. My profile is an open door... Grade  C -