I want to know if my speech is good enough you can add more information thank you?

Question

Good Morning. My name is Kevin and I am here to tell you why you should vote for me to be in your student council. Various years students that have ran to be in the student council, but did not accomplish anything, but not this year because I am determined and will work to my greatest potential to make this year the most memorable year ever. It is the job of the student council to represent you, my fellow students. I have a dream that one day, bullying will not be a problem. I have a dream that one day; I'll be in your student council. Make my dream come true, and I'll make yours come true. I want each and every one of you to know that I will take this job seriously and do it to the best of my ability, any decisions I make and any decisions that I assist in making will be with you in mind. My goals are 1. Have as many fund-raisers as possible 2.Donate half of the money that is fund-raised towards the Class of 2007/2008. 3. Work with the teachers to have as many dances as possible and many more. A promise is a declaration that one will or will not do something. As a representative of the student council, I will pledge to keep all the promises I make and will keep them. Now if you want the best, you have to vote for the best so for vote for me, Kevin, to be in your student council and I will look forward in making this year the best year ever. Thank you for your time and patience, and I hope you make the right choice!

Answer 1

I would change      "Various years students that have ran to be in the student council, but did not accomplish anything, but not this year because I am determined and will work to my greatest potential to make this year the most memorable year ever."

to

In the past, certain students elected to student council did not accomplish anything.  Not this year.  This year if I am elected,  will work to my greatest potential to make this year the most memorable year ever.

Answer 2

Guaranteed genuine service to all students!

Answer 3

Good morning, my name is Kevin, your #1 candidate for student council.  My vision is to make up for the numerous years our elected student council did'nt accomplish anything.  I am determined to work to my greatest potential to represent you, my fellow students, and together we can make this year the most memorable year ever!  

  I have a vision, and in my vision, we work together to have at least one fundraiser a week, no less than two a month.  Dances, bake sales, whatever we can come up with together.  Half of the funds raised will go toward the class of 2007/08 festivities.  

  In my vision bullies don't exist!  They get the attention they need whether from us the students, the teachers, or their parents once notified.  

  I can't do it alone, but I promise when you vote for me to be your student councilman, I will not only take this job seriously, but I pledge to keep all the promises I make.  So remember to vote for me, Kevin, the #1 candidate as your student councilman!   THANX