I want to know which of these poems you like best and how much do you like them.?

Question

1st poem:Starry Night

One starry night,

looked up at the stars

and as i scanned the night sky,

I thought i saw Mars.

A little while later,

something else caught my eye.

It turned out to be,

a shooting star on the fly.

2nd poem:The North Pole

Frozen Desert...

Lashing Snowy Winds...

Ice And Water...

Waddling Penguins...

Northern Lights Overhead...

The Snow is a blanket,

On the icy bed.

i like the North Pole one but what do you think?

P.S i'm only 11 so say how good it is for a 11 year old please.: )

Answer 1

Holy c-rap! If you really are 11 you got major freaking talent, man.

The second poem looks like it was written by a proffesional.

You captured the exact settings of the north pole.

10/10 even better than that.

For the first one, at the end

"On the fly," sounds imperfect.

You also jumped from one thing to the next, like you were scanning the skies. Perfect setup.

For your age, a 10/10. If you were much older it would be about a 6-7.

Please continue writing. I hate to see talent wasted.

Answer 2

Keep Writing.  For an 11 year old, you've got some real talent and promise.

Answer 3

Well, there are no penguins at the North Pole, you'd have to go to Antartica.  All you have to do is change the title and call them "Southern Lights."

Answer 4

I liked them both - you have a talent - well done - keep writing ♥

Answer 5

Vastly better than my 12 year old could manage  

Needs tidying.

One starry night,

I looked up at the stars

As I scanned the night sky,

I thought i saw Mars.

A little while later,

something else caught my eye.

It turned out to be,

a shooting star passing by

Pole one is good.  no quick improvements but try again.

Polar Bear, whole thing melting

The whole desert floating

the ocean upon

If environmentalists are right.

It will soon all be gone.

Answer 6

For your age, these are really good. I like the first more. Well done!