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Question

Like Mary, people with body dysmorphic disorder are emotional and they make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of previous treatment, which was performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, have had a plastic surgery done on her face for more than ten times. Even though, she is still not happy with her outcome of previous treatment.

Answer 1

On the outcome of previous treatment, people with Body Dysmorphic Disorder, like Mary, are emotional and may make may requests for additional operations.  Rebecca, a 46 year-old divorced female, for example, had facial plastic surgery more than ten times even though she was not happy with the results of her previous surgeries.

Answer 2

Like Mary, people with Body Dysmorphic Disorder are emotional. They make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of treatment which was previously performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old, divorcee named Rebecca has had over ten plastic surgeries done on her face, yet still, she is not satisfied with her outcome due to the previous treatments.