I would like some opinions please?

Question

It was a brief moment in time when I

Could run like the wind and jump so

High as to touch the clouds, and float

Down to the soft green earth gently

Landing and at once beginning to fly

Again with endless energy, staying out

In natures' air, sun, and all the elements

For hours and hours and the energy was

Without end. Playing; playing is what it was.

I found in the present time my mind had

Remained the same with that urge to play.

My body was not all unresponsive, but near

Enough to let me know the two were no

Longer in cooperation. I wanted to play again.

There was only one way to touch the sky.

Answer 1

Very much a prose poem. I would work on adding more punctuation to make the reader pause where you want.  

It was...a brief moment in time, when I etc.

Just an idea. I like the images and progression.

Answer 2

I like it. Starts off strong; I like the descriptive phrases, really helps me to imagine the actions. I'm not sure about the last few lines. Definitely applies or will eventually apply to everyone. That's what makes it good.

Answer 3

I like what the poem says; it reminds me of my childhood dreams where I could jump so high my stomach would get that roller coaster feeling. But, the enjambments make it hard to read smoothly. I'd suggest working on where you end your lines. For example:

It was a brief moment in time

When I could run like the wind,

Jump so high as to touch the clouds,

For instance, unless you have a reason for ending them where you did and I'm just not getting it.

Answer 4

It is quite good and descriptive.

i'm wondering if this is really an appropriate thing for yahoo answers though.