I wrote a new poem , any opinion?

Question

no one of us wanted it to go as far as it did

how come a bunch of roses became torn leaves

we knew something's wrong but we had to proceed

each biggest passion is taken by god's thieves

promising me you would change as much as you can

we both rided speedily on a car without brakes

everything went gradually too far as much as we ran

walking as a blind while unknown troubles are next

the soft touches started saddening and causing pain

a "foreign" person cuddled me, I just tried to escape

when I ain't placed in your heart , what it contains

the flower you held, keeps drying out, left scape

tomorrow is a new day, so why it still has past memories

it's not a matter of time until my scars disappear

we always play lovers while everyone stands and sees

they all know why despite of that we're still having fear

Answer 1

Nissim, why are you making it difficult for people to appreciate what you have to say?  By having practically no punctuation you are saying.....I don't care if anyone understands this, I do...but, surely you should be trying to communicate?

(incidentally - it should be we both rode speedily in a car - is English not your first language?  I'm not trying to belittle you....it just seems an odd construction for an English speaker)

This might be a poem worth reading - but, it is too much trouble for me to decipher which is a pity

Answer 2

It sounds good just you have to make your main idea of what your trying to say clearer

please answer mine

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

Answer 3

I mean... It's one of those poems that makes no sense... It sounds better than most of the yahoo answer poems... But this still needs a lot of work.

And punctuation please....