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I wrote a poem about the importance of family. I'm 17. Opinions? Be honest!?

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A Shack on Mary’s drive

On Mary’s Drive I dwell

Accompanied by few

To this day I’m the smallest shack

Mary’s drive has ever knew

Surrounding me are houses

Much bigger, much more strong

Their walls are covered in hard red brick

Material for which I long

They were shacks once long ago

This fact I know as true

Yet unlike me made out of tree

Received they materials new

Within those brick lined walls

Lies a group of their own breed

Families known as “the nation’s best”

Fill their homes with greed

A shack on Mary’s Drive

On Mary’s Drive I dwell

My walls are old and wooden

Far from an easy sell

With all these facts against me

I cannot help but grin

I’m much too old and tiny

Yet somehow I still win

Look past my broken hinges

Look through my window small

Deep within me, a group of three

They’ve close to nothing at all

As they look upon their neighbors

I look upon mine

We may not have those hard red bricks

But we’ll remain just fine

What we possess is FAMILY

And yes that is a wealth

We’ll stick together through the rain

Through sickness and through health

-ME- <33333

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  1. Who&#039;s Mary?


  2. i think its badass!!

    i like the ending especially its awesome!!!

    =D

    i guess i cant really describe how awesome it is, well, just the fact that it talks about family and being united is more important than materialistic stuff (if im correct) makes it AWESOME!!

  3. for a 17 yrs old, that&#039;s pretty good! keep practicing.

  4. You are so right...the others may be big fine houses, but the small, little &quot;shack&quot; per se is a HOME because it contains life, love, and warmth, all because of the FAMILY inside. Money can&#039;t buy that. Thanks for sharing.

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