I wrote a poem called "Traveler" few days ago. What do you think of it?

Question

Traveler

Don't cry to me about what you did

It wasn't a necessary evil

It was a superfluous journey

You didn't have to abandon us

We would have been here for you

I would have been here for you

So don't come crawling to me now

Talking about your failed dreams

Or loving memories

Don't whisper your darkest fears

Or elaborate aspirations

Don't come and tell me any of this...

Because I'll hang on your every word

Each one more satisfying than the last

Answer 1

Very good, I like it. All of us have someone in our life that we feel this way about, and you portrayed it nicely. Thank you for sharing.

Answer 2

Oh yeah, good one! I like the paybacks are he** theme to it!! A nice free style poem, that is seemingly a love poem in the beginning, but gives that "shove it" surprise ending. Very good. Bravo! Thanks for sharing, please continue to write.