I wrote a poem. comment plz =p?

Question

Weep, My Willow, Weep

Your branches sway for ones departure

Watching as they leave their tracks behind

Yet no one sees your soul caged

In a thick ring of blistered wood

Weep, My Willow, Weep

Like dew on leaves, tears fall

While insomniac animals scurry

Whoosh, Whoosh, sweet lullaby

Standing Still in everlasting sleep

Weep, my Willow, Weep

Answer 1

i thought it was beautiful! keep up the good work! =)

if oyu want you can check out my poems... their pretty much underneath yours in the poetry section =)

Answer 2

Beautiful! You need not change a thing unless you actually 'feel' it. I loved it very much. Poems have to be happy...and poems have to be depressing. We can never give up on any of the colors of life. Be careful of what some people will tell you. Trust in yourself. Your poem really does work, believe me. Peace

Answer 3

Wow, great. At first I didn't think I would like it because I saw the repetition right away, but after I read the whole thing I changed my mind. Good work.

Answer 4

Honestly i don't understand it...then again i may be dumb : /

O well an opinion is an opinion

Answer 5

Its Ok but poetry does not have to be depressing.

Answer 6

I dunno, 1st stanza was better than the next. but it is so direct and dark. U lost control on the 2ND stanza. Try some thing more imaginative & more intact.