I wrote an editorial is it any good?

Question

It got featured in my towns paper and now my mom wants me 2 start writing and become an author or journalist is my article ok 4 a seventh grader?

My Article:

Station should remove

ad for hangover drug

Did you know that 27 percent of high school students confessed to drinking before eight grade? In America, drinking acohol is a major problem, which causes accidents, depression and suicide.

Parents might not want to hear this, but it's true.

So the real question is this: Are some people supporting teen drinking?

KWRE, a local radio station, has put an ad on recently about a new drug called Chaser pills, which is meant to prevent hangovers. The ad said that you could buy them anywhere. It makes you wonder if a teenager can hide an addiction from their family and friends.

Why would KWRE put this ad on the morning news? Given these moving facts, I strongly recommend they take the ad off the air.

Kristen Windham

Seventh-grade student

Answer 1

For a seventh grader, it's not bad. What's impressive is you wrote the editorial only using the word, "I," once. Many older columnists have this problem. Kudos.

If you want to get better, just read other columnists. You can access their stuff through online papers or a print edition's Web site.

Nice job though. Next time, just do a little more research, answer any question you ask and try to back up your statements with more than just, I think this should be taken off. The lead (intro) didn't really imply that's what you were getting at.

Answer 2

Needs a little proofreading: eight grade (eighth grade), a teenager ...their family (teenagers...their family.

Could be cut somewhat.

Good start, keep it up.

Answer 3

wow that's good 4 a 7th grader!! i mean honestly it's catchy, non-boring subject, and sadly true.

GOOD JOB!! =)