I wrote my girlfriend a short poem, need opinions?!??

Question

It may sound gross but I was inspired by the bad gas I was having. The gas symbolizes the bad times our relationship has gone through but we turn out okay. Do you like it? Should I give it to her?

A puff of wind decends from the heart

Slides down your backbone and generates a f**t

A f**t is very useful, it gives the body ease

It warms the bed in winter and suffocates the fleas

Answer 1

OMG LMFAO I LOVE IT!!! dude i wish i was your gf.

Answer 2

suqs but it is funny

Hope she has a sense of hmor

LOL

i  liked it but depends

Answer 3

lol if you gf has a sense of humour she will like it. If she expects a romantic poem though, this isn't it.

But I do think its a decent poem...despite the odd subject matter lol

Answer 4

haha thats pretty funny.  i love it.  i dont know if its a "give to your girlfriend" poem though, might be more of a "show to your girlfriend" poem if you know what i mean

i think the poem is great but i think it scans better if you change generates to makes and suffocates to kills.  try reading it that way

Answer 5

um. . . no offense, but if i were you, i wouldnt give it to her.

nice rhymes?

Answer 6

No no no absolutely not! And if you are going to give her a poem don't make it rhyme, its just cheesy if you do. Rewrite it!

Answer 7

If ur girlfriend has humor she might like it. its great for me its alittle funny.  makes sense though