I wrote these lyrics to my friend....are they good enough?

Question

its for her birthday...they're not great,(or finished) but can you rate them?

every day

every moment

life is a winding rode

now today

its your birthday?*said in a really cute confused voice ^-^*

(pre-chorus)

let me know

how it goes

walking down thews lonely rodes

(chorus)

walk with me

take my hand

don't...give....up

on thews dreams =3

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now could you give me some tips?

or more lyrics?

plus rate it!

Answer 1

no.

Answer 2

wellllllllllll mr.

i think its really good .. and its not like your some professional song writer that needs to be a complete genius soo dont listen to the rude people because its not like they could do ne better.. sooo yeah!

:) i like it alot, and its defiantly the thought that counts so go for it (:

scale of 1-5 i sayyyy 4

Answer 3

i think that its cute <3

rating it 1-5 id say it was a 4

i dont thinl it will matter so much if the lerics are good

its the thought that counts

she'll just LOVE the fact that u wrote her a song

ik i wold

good luck

Answer 4

id give it a 8/10 rating. i like the theem but not how you used the word those alot and at the end how you talk about dreams instead of her birthday. try this:

                       ... take my hand i'll lead you the way through

                       the maze! to the day of your life you'll never forget.

                       (in a deep voice) a glorios day, your birthday!!! yeah

                        yee yeah!

                      

                      hope you like it! by the way its so cute your writing a song for your friend! love it!!!

Answer 5

Eh.. kind of lame and unoriginal...

Answer 6

CONGRATULATIONS!? *SAID IN CUTE F*CKING CONFUSED VOICE*

They suck! Why aren't you there if it is your friend? When I read these I was thinkinggggggggggggggggggggggggg of death, and blackness, and how much your life sucks. And how I will kill you... but anywhoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooof... Now for CHRISTOPHER MICHAEL CARTER|RETRAC LEAHCIM REHPOTSIRHC

h**l-o friend! Im another perso'n with a diffrent take.

Ok man you gutta be yourself.If your g*y then hey thats coo'

But man these lyric'z Suck azz. So my *** how you gonna get sh*t done wit theze lyrucs so man I suhggest youse get a lesson and don' be a retarded persona!

GET ON YO KNEES, ******!  

Answer 7

um, isnt 'Life is a winding road' from The Jonas Brothers who is your display picture?

Just wondering.

So far its pretty good.

Answer 8

Pretty good. I like writing songs too.