I wrote this, is it good? ?

Question

I wrote this about a year ago to my ex boyfriend. I NEVER gave it to him though.Don't say I'm pathetic because you have no idea what happen in that relationship. I'm just asking if its good. Try not to be to hard on me :]

I DON'T FEEL THIS WAY ANYMORE. I'VE MOVED ON :]

To: Doug.

I still love you.

When you broke up with me, a part inside of me died. I just cant believe were over. I'll never get to kiss you again. You don't want me, and that hurts, because i still want you.

You were the best thing that has ever happened, i'm so afraid that i will never find someone as amazing as you were to me.

I would give anything to have one more day with you. To kiss you. To hold hands with. To hug. To Say " i love you ".

I miss the way you looked at me. I miss your lips against mine. I miss the way you texted me every night saying how much i meant to you. I miss your silly little nicknames for me. Baby I miss you.

I remember when you asked me out. I remember our first kiss. You were the only thing that mattered to me.

I hate that we don't talk. I hate that i probably meant nothing to you. I hate how you don't miss me.

I never got how people could love the person they hate. But i surely get it now.

You changed me. i will never be the person i was before i meant you.

You promised me forever. What happened?

I told you i would die without you, and i just might.

Answer 1

Pretty good. Kinda sad. I hope you meet someone special again =)

Answer 2

its a little too mushy for me, but i guess its good.

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Answer 3

A little on the cliche side.

Answer 4

i think it's good...just a little jumbled. and VERY mushy.

Answer 5

Wow!!! that was so amazing i almost cried.I can completly relate!

Answer 6

Omg, you are AMAZING.  :)

That was truly awesome, and made me get emotional. Hehe.

The last few lines touched me the most, I think. It was great. :]

Hehes, I'm glad to hear you guys are good friends now. :)

<3

Answer 7

Awhh that is so sweet; almost made me cry :,)

Answer 8

I bet you feel a lot better after you wrote it. Because you were able to get it off you're chest. It's good to write things out. So good for you.

Answer 9

Honestly... if you were trying to get him back.. he'd pry think that was some annoying BS

Answer 10

The beginning is cliche and a little too mushy for me, but the ending was amazing!  It really relates to my situation that I'm in right now, and for some odd reason those words have just made my heart sink.  You have a way with words and it sounds like what you wrote really came from the heart.

Answer 11

very good and touching u have a very good way with words

Answer 12

ya its really good! i like it!

Answer 13

sounds like you got it off tv or a book not trying to be mean though i understand it came from your heart and you just wanted himto understand but try being more creative with words

Answer 14

WOW...FANTASTIC, YOU REALLY HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS.

Answer 15

Why would it matter now if you've moved on ??

if this is how you actually felt then it is good. I know that when my ex left I pretty much had the same feelings. only time can mend the broken heart and that which doesn't kill us only makes us stronger.

Answer 16

Dont and i repeat DONT send that to him. He will show all his friends. Therefore giving you a bad name.Just leave it.Best of Luck.

Answer 17

Its way too much, sounds like your trying to make him feel sorry for you and it's just making you look really desperate and pathetic. Whenever people are dumped they always look bad when they can't just accept it and move on.  

Answer 18

Yes, but you need a chorus.  That is amazing.

Answer 19

I think it's quite sweet.. And I know what you mean about the whole not giving it to him thing. Sometimes you just need to get it all down to give your mind a break. But it's cute, and sad also.