I wrote this and its in a book wat do u think?

Question

i get lost wen i look into ur eyes i think to myslef am i dreaming becuz ive never met a girl like u wen im wth u my heart beats faster my knees get weak every time u hug me i get nervous every kiss has me speechless and every day i thank god 4 having u in my life....be honest plz

Answer 1

Michael Jackson  

Answer 2

Honestly, it's cliche, and very teenage.

There are much more creative ways to write something like this. Subtlety is key - love should be shown, not told.

Answer 3

for a book, no.  

Answer 4

Ummm...it's terrible on many levels. The spelling grammar, style and content are all sub-standard. You can do better. A monkey could do better.

You asked for honesty...

Answer 5

..... i and wen?

You mean "I and When'

I get lost when I look into your eyes;  I think to myself am I dreaming because I've never met a girl like you. When I'm with you my heart beats faster, and my knees get weak every time you hug me. I get nervous. Every kiss has me speechless and every day I thank god for having you in my life.

EDIT: Oh, btw I'm bad with grammer so that isn't the best :p

Answer 6

its lovley <3

Answer 7

did you use spell check?

it's a big run-on sentence.

Answer 8

i love it! it really shows the characters feelings. i think it should be in a book. just make sure you speell correctly. *_*