I wrote this for my son. What do you think?

Question

Where did you go?

What did you see?

A world where you could not find me.

A world so bitter

So profound

A place I hoped would not be found.

It was your life for just a while

I missed your laugh

I missed your smile.

But you came back to be with us

The love we shared

Was love enough.

Wherever you go

Whatever you see

Never go

Where I can't be.

Answer 1

Very touching and emotional, well done

Answer 2

you are a good father,not much like you and for the silly person who said you are a g*y i think he is

your rythem is nice and your feelings are true and thats what make a good peot

Answer 3

It sounded like he went to war.

Glad he's OK. It take guts to beat drugs.

Answer 4

best this week

Answer 5

This is really touching and I liked it a lot.

Answer 6

This is great, full of reason, the flow of it all went well, keep it up, your good.

Answer 7

I write this to 'Darker Than Truth': I am also g*y and as a g*y person why would you use a degrogatory term that we hate in relation to a poem?  How old are u..... 5? Clearly a poem has no sexuality, be it straight g*y or bi...duh!

Anyway I think it's very touching! Good Job. I assuming it's about a loss, drugs or drink.....you can feel the emotion in your choice of words!

Nice & Heartfelt! :)

RE: Darker Than Truth: By "we" I meant civilized g*y people with morals, it's so cute that you think you were included in that statement you emotionless d*ckhead!

Answer 8

What a very touching poem! You are definatly a gifted poest. Lordy, go see a publisher!!!! I'm astonished at your work. Great job. Give yourself a pat on the back! :)

Answer 9

This is VERY beatiful!

Having a son far away I can really relate to this. I miss him soooo much!

You and your son are blessed to have such closeness.

I just read the details you added and the words are even more perfect now.

Answer 10

omg i love it , very deep , it touched me

and i dont no you . would be interesting

to no what your son thought ,

i hope with the love you obviously have

that his dark days are over ,

Answer 11

Touching  =)

Answer 12

That's one of the most heart-felt poems I've seen for a long time. Fantastic, very deep and gave me a lump in my throat.

Answer 13

Your feelings come out so clearly in this, and shows me a true, undying love for your son. An "agape" love, to go all greek and very weird. Agape, however, is the term for the love of God for mankind, unlimited, breathtaking, not judgmental, non-compromising. This is what shines through your poem. In fact, that is what I would title it. Agape Love...

Thank you for this beautiful poem and beautiful glimpse into motherhood. Your son is an extremely blessed man to have someone who so obviously cares in his life. blessed be, thank you for touching my heart.

Answer 14

Aww thats soo nice!!!

Answer 15

Brought tears to my eyes!!

Answer 16

ignore the g*y comments. it was absolutely beautiful i wish my dad wrote poems like that your son is very lucky

Answer 17

Sweet, Tender and full of heart, this is what came across, sounds like a missed love you had for your son!  Cheers!!

Answer 18

Wow.

That was absolutely amazing! I really loved the ending "Never go where I can't be"...that blew me away.

Your poem isn't too complex to understand, but it's deep and obviously came from the heart.

I loved it...keep writing. :)

God bless you, your son, and your loved ones,

--Emily

Answer 19

thats good mate,it shows you care,and hopefully your son will understand your pain,you dont have to be g*y to write,i thought like that,it can happen to us all,lol,it shows your human with feelings,pain.i wish you well,and hope you find the strenth to carry on,un trapped.

Answer 20

That is really lovely-It brought tears to my eyes.

So glad that you got your son back from the drugs.

Answer 21

Very nice and very touching.