I wrote this in someone elses question yesterday, it was my reply..what u think of it? ?

Question

a many bones is as i see you

hardly human in the eyes of the venue.

the outside is weak

the inside is beat

a day closer to death

please come back to the rest

the mirror tells the truth

but your eyes, they hold the fruit

So close them tight

and just take a bite...

one day at a time

you'll someday find

Your not alone

and you need more meat on your bone

just ask for the help

and all hands will go up

my dear friend

don't make this the end

wake up from this dream

and belt out a scream

tomorrow you must live

or some day soon the beats will give.

Answer 1

it is a good poem-reply to a what question I know not.

There is some good effort to rhyming; there is also a good beat too. There is a certain mystery in the whole poem. Is this a beat of thedrum before the war and aan end to this dream , or is it a knell ? There is a certain picture that is slowly but surely hinting, that you have got to live or else the count of beat as though will start to tell the end of a tale.