I wrote this poem, any tittle ideas and honest opinions?

Question

ok well I'm 15 and wrote this poem

please give me your true opinion, i wont get offend

also if u have any suggestions or ideas for the tittle that would be great

=)

a rush

you cant explain

a sence of happyness

that wont go away

the urge to sing

when every one is around

the need to skip

where ever u might go

when you crave to smile

even if your down

to lose sight

of what is around

to nevr whant to speak again

for the sake that it might go away

the kind of greedyness

taht feels ok

a stomach ache

you look foward to each day

to adore, to fancy

to fall for, to prize

to be nuts about

to love

and it does'nt matter what you say

love just is

that feeling we all share

Answer 1

You've got some basically good ideas here, but they're in danger of being lost to poor proofreading.  Your spelling and grammar need work, and it's jarring to use a word like "crave" at one point, while speaking of "going nuts" at another, as well as using u and ok.  Simplify, don't reach for language you don't know how to handle.  Look up words to find their proper spelling and usage.

Answer 2

i really love that! it's great! whoever he is, he must be special. . . . . : )

Answer 3

Correct some of your grammar first. :)

*happiness - happiness

*u - you

*your - you’re

*nevr – never

*greedyness – greediness

*wahnt – want

*taht – that

*does'nt – doesn’t

Otherwise, it’s not really a poem I’d read. In other words, it’s not my style. =P

Perhaps you could use the title “The Feeling” or “Feeling?” They’re not too original, but they fit.

Edit it. Proof read. Edit again.

Good luck with your poem!

Answer 4

I really liked it. Maybe you could title it 'Love the Feeling'. I don't know, I'm not much of a poet.

Answer 5

idk what a good title is but its very good.