I wrote this poem and I really need opinions can you tell me yours?

Question

If you think that its awful please explain why

If you like it please feel free to explain why

I am in love with the Hero

I am in love with the Villain

I can't decide which side I'm on

I would fight for Gotham City

the question is would I fight to

save it, bring it to the light

Or would I fight to bring it down,

drag it into the night?

Am I symbol of justice

or a symbol of fright

The question is what

is wrong and what

is right?

Is the world all a botch job

gone horribly wrong, something

to be destroyed with the swipe

of a hand

Or is the world in all its imperfection

something to be saved, stopped

from extinction?

I am in love with the Hero

I am in love with the Villain

I ask you this one question;

who would you choose?

Something I wrote and I hoped you enjoyed

of course its about Batman and Joker and

what is the right choice.

Please tell me what you think!

Answer 1

I like the way it sounds when I read it out loud.

Answer 2

except for the last two lines I really liked it, I just wonder why they were included.  Sitting here re reading this again, what distracts me about the last two lines is you asking me, as the reader, to decide something that has already been decided by the reader.  It may well be no one else agrees with this.  It's the single stumble I had with the entire piece.

Answer 3

I enjoyed this.  It has something to say and you have found a unique way to say it.

Introduction of the Gotham City scenario has enhanced the poem no end.  It brings colour to the picture you are painting.

The poem is structured well, and doesn't suffer from 'desperate' rhyming (my pet hate) ....Asking questions, as you do, draws in your reader, we get a sense of involvement from this.  And you move the poem a full circle back to your opening question which adds structure to the whole.  Well done.

Answer 4

I like the contradicting of inside yourself in this poem. I think you should explore that more and also have more sensory details so that the reader can feel your confusion to pick good or bad. Overall, i think this is a great poem!

Answer 5

One little comment - I think you should decide if you definitely want it to rhyme or not - there are a few random rhymes - but I say either make it all rhyme or none of it.

Answer 6

I liked it..

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Answer 7

I think it is very evocative, the imagery is just so sublime. I cannot tell you how much that I love this. Truly talented!

Answer 8

I liked it it made alot of sence and had kind of a twist to it