I wrote this poem and was wandering about your thoughts on it?

Question

Forever Music.

It was only that then I could understand.

But it breeds, enhances and ampilifies.

Turns my mood around changes how I feel from within.

The sound of clarity exemplified.

Summer seems to be retreating slowly.

A change is afoot.

Yet everything remains in afterglow.

The bloom refuse to wilt anonymously.

This year the leaves dont want to shrivel or decay.

The birds reside in their summer homes.

They sing on even though their time is ending.

They scream vibrant plummage... alive.

A stranger creeps through the town at night

Icy fingers scraping at doors.

His breath taints the air above and within.

That initial sense of dread. Brought forth only doubt.

Slipping fingers, a hand that let go.

Lost forever in a memory of black frosty night.

All of nature moves on .

Seasons change.

Women leave.

They take everything..

That reassuring touch of silkiness.

A gentle laughter.

The clinking of chilled wine glasses

Answer 1

That was creepy and wierd at the same time. But other than that OK. ......lol  :)

Answer 2

its deep,and sad,some things you just can not change,some things you can never get over,but you just have to accept,it has feeling,lost.i think its alright,i understand it,a constant reminder,try not to dwell,peAce.a moment in time.

Answer 3

Well, I was happy, now I'm kind of sad.....

But in a good way.

Actually, that was much better than I expected. I like the way it's almost like a painting - each line fills in another color in my head...:)

I also like the fact that you compare the changing of seasons with women and love, and even the way you describe the girl who left you. (?) "That reassuring touch of silkiness. A gentle laughter." I'd like to be descried like that...

Nice.

Publish it! :)

Answer 4

Very long though well done!

you produced it very well.

You should be a poetry writer!

100%honest

Answer 5

Your poem is ok, it has deep feelings.

Answer 6

Very descriptive, and meaning-full , loved the metaphor, good job and well done!! Cheers!!

Answer 7

i honestly loved them both, u rock, and hard i might add (and i do)  but u seem to stuck on love, not really easily forgottn huh? i'm sorry for whatever it is that happened, but use it, in ure writing i mean and in life, for every experience there is a lesson to be learned, figure out what ure's is.