I wrote this song...Is it good?

Question

Well i wrote this song....And I thought I might want people to...Rate it or comment on it....Please tell me what you think!

1,2,3,4

Ooooo! Yeeeaahaaa!

Ooooo! Yeeeaahaaa!

Verse 1

You might know me

I might know you

It doesn't matter though

'Cuz I'm not gonna look for trouble

Verse 2

I know I've seen you before

I know for a fact that this ain't no intuition

Baaaabe!

So you gotta listen to me

And now we're floating in thoughts

Sinking in deep...

Chorus

I know you

I know you

I know i know you!

But you don't know

But you don't know

But you don't know me!

You don't....Need to worry....About anything

Verse 3

Babe, can't you remember me?

Was your mind wiped out or something?

Was it something I said?

That pulled you away from me?

Verse 4

I honestley can't think

Why you would hate me

But what I do know

Is what you're aiming for

You're looking for that one perfect girl

Oh, you're looking for that one perfect giiiiiirl!

I know you

I know you

I know i know you!

But you don't know

But you don't know

But you don't know me!

You don't....Need to worry....About anything

Bridge

Why do I cry?

Every Night?

I just want you to embrace!

And feel you against me!

Why can't I just have that?

Why can't you accept me?

Why?

WHY?

Repeat Chorus twice first softly and then loud

(I miss)

(I miss)

(I miss you)

(Why?)

(Why?)

(Why can't I have you?)

(Only)

(Only)

(Only you could make this better, baaaaabe....)

I know you

I know you

I know i know you!

But you don't know

But you don't know

But you don't know me!

You don't....Need to worry....About anything

Oooooo! Yeah.....Ooo.....Oh....Oh

Answer 1

honestly, when I'm reading it, i cant tell. it might be the way i'm interpreting it in my head. Well, it['s actually sung it, it may sound like a totally different song because of the voice, phrasing, pauses, tempo and  whole bunch of other stuff. Soooo, i say put it on youtube and post this question again. There's gonna be different comments. but i think it's got potential. but like you said.....you're a writer. So pretty cool, Keep writing. The message and lyrics are good

Answer 2

Its great!!!!! I write songs too & i'm a singer. UR great. keep up the good work girl!!!!

Answer 3

I love it! Like Chris said, it probably souds better when you sing it instead of reading it but I still ♥ it. Im gonna print it and try to sing it me self! lol Keep up your good work, i love it, very passionate.