Id like to know if you like my poem?

Question

Do you like the poem i wrote?

As Earth crumbles

Those summer nights bare the sun,

Will soon be nocturnal ever sleep,

Still the sleepers beneath have won,

Wither to slither the greens bleak.

The Oak and Redwood all grandfathers,

Rooted the forest through rough,

In the crumbling soil and bothers,

But tumble on dead lands scuff.

Great seven seas wash and wave,

Never as black you have been,

Night skies you stare cannot save,

As everything crumbles between.

Wilts and dark are the lands,

Ever since the suns been clouded,

Oceans write death on the sands,

Nothing to save the shrouded.

The last hop in a frog till it dies,

Creatures by crawlers wait out,

Under shadowy thunderous skies,

Birds and bees scatter about.

Even the night of stars do look,

And dark reigns but light depends,

The wilderness universe soon took,

As Earth slowly crumbles and ends.

Answer 1

its really good.

Answer 2

Very original. Totally out there. Some what long, and stuffy, I guess. Every line was very strong, like thick smoke. I think you hopped from one idea to the next just a little to quick.

I'd give it a

5.3/10

This poem is far from cliche. What a ditz.

Answer 3

To appreciae a poem and esp. from a  poet as you , one has to have a little time, one has to allow to sink in the vista of our memory and our understanding so that the image is allowed to emerge and the hidden meaning reveals itself.

i have read today twice . Kindly allow me two more days to appreciate it fully.

As usual the last line is the key to your poems :

As Earth slowly crumbles and ends.

Let us remember what T. S, Elliot says :

The world shall end not by a bang , but by a whimper.

I have noticed that in the study of your poems there is invariably a certain katharsis of our emotional and intellectual being.

Let us just say, I like your poem and there is much that one has to observe and gather in to appreciate it in its elements.

Answer 4

it was ok i guess i still like poems that r more fun but still poem ppl will like it im just not a poem person i hate most poems

Answer 5

Cliche.