Im 14 and dont have very good grammar.help pretty please.i want to sound very proffesional.?

Question

Im trying to sound very proffesional u can change words or add words if u want -------------->

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Hi Mrs.Lynn the reason regarding this e-mail is due to my intrest in becoming a volunteer at the Miami Children's Hosipital this summer. I feel that I work very well with children and I am intrested in pursuing a medical career in the future. I read the requirments and I saw the volunteer services, I am very intrested in eigther working in the Emergency Room or Radiology.

Answer 1

use spell check on your final draft

Answer 2

Mrs. Lynn,

The reason I am sending you this e-mail is due to the fact I am interested in becoming a volunteer at the Miami Children's Hospital this summer. I feel that I am good with children, and capable of being an acceptional volunteer. I read the requirements and I saw the volunteer services. I would perfer to work in the Emergency Room or Radiology.

Thank you.

Answer 3

Ask you counselor, your english teacher or a speech teacher.

Answer 4

Lynn is her first name; her last name is Heyman.  And you don't know if she's married.  And you should mention the fact that you're 14.  

Dear Ms. Heyman,

I am interested in volunteering at Miami Children's Hospital this summer.  I am 14 years old, and very good with children.  I'm planning to purse a medical career in the future, and am very interested in volunteering in the Emergency Room or Radiology, if possible.

Thank you,

You

Answer 5

You are starting off WAY TOO FAMILIAR. Unless you know them PERSONALLY, you need a last name. And you need to work on the spelling. Remember this is a LETTER. I added the Thank you at the end just because its more formal.

Hi Mrs.Lynn:

The reason for sending you this e-mail is due to my interest in becoming a volunteer at the Miami Children's Hospital this summer. I feel that I work very well with children and I am interested in pursuing a medical career in the future. I read the requirements for working in the volunteer services. I am very interested in either working in the Emergency Room or Radiology. You may contact me at (phone number) or at this email. I thank you for your time and hope to be hearing from you soon

Sincerely