Im supposed to be free - poem?

Question

Im supposed to be free from cares but I worry everyday,

Everyone around forces to me to stay,

Do I dare to break free from the religious chains or do stay as a alter waiting for orders?

Im tired of politics, Im tired of people telling me how I should live my life.

So if things dont change in 90 days you will see the darker side to me.

dont worry Im venting- comment please (yes it needs work)

Answer 1

This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

Answer 2

not sure its quite a poem...

its a great idea tho. try building on it and breakin it up so theres some rhythm!

Answer 3

I like it, and I don't think it need alot of work.

Keep on thinking, and it'll work.

Answer 4

It almost seems like a angry rant versus a poem, its has alot of potential though, work with what you got a work a little poetry into here and there