In creative writing on imaginative journeys, how do you 'show' a learning from it, by showing not telling?

Question

thanks, please answer in less than an hour and if it does help, you get...

a creative prize of 10 points!

Answer 1

I know this isn't in the hour but I thought I may as well try to help anyway. I'm not sure how to do it but this is my guess:

Instead of writing....'the male teenager went for a jog'

you can say:

'the school's most popular jock was watching his feet pass beneath him, landing solidly on the rough cross-country track'

OR

instead of writing: 'the sun was hot'

you can say:

'An overflowing lava balloon hung in the heavens between a few pieces of white marshmallow'

hope i helped (if i was right...haha...put a story of yours on here...id love to read it)

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