What do you think. This poem I would like to keep. Please highlight faults. Cheers : )
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Sun: By Tia Metcher
Held tightly in Orion’s arm,
Ancient relics believe ones charm,
Over looking Egyptian Sharm,
The Sun can harm, The Sun can harm,
Glitter spread upon opal plight,
Beneath ecliptic skies of night,
Providing ultra-violet light,
It is so bright, it is so bright,
Travel by Apex to Vega,
Hercules our great reign mega,
Reflecting its glow of Strega,
Sun is omega, Sun is omega.
I was thinking of changing the mega and omega around. What do you think?
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