Intro help for a paper?

Question

hi yall, i am writing a paper about obama and mccain but i think my intro is a bit weak, i was wondering if you all can give some tips..

The presidential election is coming soon and it’s time for America to choose a new president. Our two candidates are: Senator John McCain from the Republican Party and Senator Barack Obama from the Democratic Party. Both candidates promise a more prosperous nation, to reform America. Who will America choose? Who will be our next leader?

Answer 1

good

Answer 2

I think its great but you should try something like "Throughout the past few months, the people of the United States of America have begun to realize and ponder that we will soon have a new president. As November comes around, voters will be asking themselves whether to vote for Senator John McCain from the Republican Party or Senator Barack Obama from the Democratic Party. While both promise a properous nation, they also have their differences in platforms."

I LOVE to write and im only 15. So anymore questions i would love to help. Hope this helps.

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Answer 3

I would add more about the similarities and differences that you will address, and then just cut it down and make it as short as you can while still saying everything you want to. Being concise is a mark of an excellent writer. Make it a game and see how few words you can use to say it, while still including necessary info; one idea: Obama and McCain both promise a more prosperous nation, but who will be given the opportunity to try?

Answer 4

Here you have some info about McCain vs. Obama

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