Is it Worth reading?

Question

Is it..

http://www.booksie.com/young_adult/novel/sweetdreamer/not-sure-yet

I wrote it.

Any tips? Complaints?

Answer 1

yeah i think its pretty good! i enjoyed reading it :D

Answer 2

omigosh you wrote that!!

that's really good

i love it lol

Answer 3

It didnt grab me. And I dont know if a curse word is the best way to start off the opening sentence. Maybe the reason why it didnt apeal to me so much is because it didnt seem to be in my favorite genre.

Answer 4

You've got a good start but it needs some edititing done on it.  One of the things I would suggest is to watch words like really and just.  The other thing is that it doesn't flow and was really hard to read.  But like I said you've got a good start but you need to clean it up before it's ready to show anybody.  To mean to sound harsh just giving you my honest opinion and I know first hand that critism isn't always easy to hear.