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Is it a good poem?

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How Long

How long would I love you? Till when?

A year? . . . two, or ten?

This heart says: "forever"

"Never, Never!!!!"

The mind shouts: "Never!"

"You cannot love him forever."

The war is fired

Between the heart and the mind!

The blood cannot find

A room to run into, to hide!

My heart and mind became foes

When the eyes first saw you.

The questions switched off the light

When I asked:

"How long will I love you? Till when?"

A strange man will buy my heart

With a precious golden coin.

In my womb he will plant

Not your child, not your son.

And this hot sun,

Will burn the seas vibrate the rivers,

When the heart shouts:

"Never, never!"

The days of the calendar

Are all Fridays,

The months are all Novembers.

A red heart on each square,

Tells me it is a nightmare.

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  1. Pretty good! You should become a poet or something...


  2. wow awsome..I just heard of this website.. you shoudl oplace it on there..  good job.

    (sorry if you wrote it  for personal reasons, seems your unhappy )

    http://www.poetry.com/

  3. its amazing good work

  4. yea it's awesome!!

  5. thats pretty good!

    it made me get this weird feeling(a good one!;))

    in my opinion i think you should take out the exclamation marks..because it makes the poem seem demanding and harsh..and i think its supposed to give off a warm soft feeling

    about how you love this boy and your heart says forever but your mind says never. i like it though..its unique and very well put together! i coulndt have written that!! lol

    i think its great!!:)

  6. Yeah that poem is really good! A few stanzas are tad bit off for me (but we all read differently) but that's okay it's an excellent piece all together :-) Nice work

  7. I'm not a poetry expert, but to me -- it's a very good poem. Keep writing!

  8. this can be made into a song! i've never wrote work like that!

  9. It's actually quite nice!

  10. sorry but i don't like cheesy things so i got a quoter of the way on the first stanza

  11. its almost like love at first sight...in the poem you can fill the inner struggle between her and her thoughts, mind and heart....i loved it

    if its not to much to ask i just started writing poems could you check out mine http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

  12. Good. Nice poem.

  13. Incredible.

    Keep it up
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