Is it a poem?

Question

Kinda short to be a poem. What do you guys/girls think of it?

Hear the melancholy whispers in my laughter.

See through the light reflecting on my pupils ever so brightly,

for my eyes are dead.

Ignore the cruel words that I mutter,

for I am speaking of myself.

Don't be fooled by my calm behaviour,

for I am fighting a stressful battle in my mind.

I am distant from reality and time is of no value to me,

so I tell myself.

I adore and detest my solitude.

It keeps me alive,

Yet it is the very thing that is killing me.

I do not belong to anything.

I am everything and everyone,

Yet at the same time I am nothing.

I'm not what you want me to be and I'm not what you don't want me to be. I'm just a fragment of a neglected dream,

Floating through this large universe without meaning.

Answer 1

Yes, it's absolutely a poem, and not short for one, either. Haiku are only three lines, and they're poetry.

My subjective opinion is that it has promise, but the constant  contrasts (melancholy laughter, calm/stressful, adore/detest, etc.) are a tiny bit much. Maybe trim them down a bit and it would be great. The message is definitely there, it just needs some editing.

Answer 2

Nope a poem should rhyme.

Answer 3

It is a poem written in free verse, well done it is genuine one that  is ,it reflect all your emotions

Answer 4

yes, poetry is subjective.

Answer 5

its good it doesnt have to rhyme,its creative enough,it says a lot.some put them into 4s,or miss a line and make the second rhyme,its whatever you feel,aslong as you do,thats all that matters,your still expressing your thoughts and feelings,and i think whatever way you do that,is a good thing.and i would say thats about the right length,18/22,lines,it doesnt matter how long aslong as you have said what you mean,i wish you well,peAce.

Answer 6

It's a poem.  It's in free verse.  & it's an average length for a poem really.

It's a wonderful poem too!  I love it.  Has a lot of meaning to some people, I'm sure.  Where's it from?  Did you write it??

Answer 7

Yes it is, and agood one too, it has sentiments and emotions that are universal. Heres a coupla tips, avoid cliches, avoid anachronisms ( e.g 'for Iam'), Keep writing you have real potential there, Peace M.

Answer 8

Quite good.Have more belief in your writing ability.