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The Love Song of "Marry"!!!!!!!!!!!

I am here now, look!

I am still so young,

To lament, to cry

To die!!

Don’t let me say

Don’t change this May

Into the month of my birthday

It's winter ,snow and rain

Makes love go in vain

And every cup of coffee

Will kill you; make you wish you were never

Been here

In a life that kills

And revives

Just to rekill!!!

I know you've lost

Your voice and was left

Without a heart, without a blood

Only some mud

And a few coal

In your chest

Turns you on like a tool

But believe me the mill

Never stops for one lost his love

For a silly dove

Gone and lost in a grey sky

Even if it dies

No one will care, no one will tell.

Oh, oh, yes I admit

But dear I am sorry

For not being able to be sorry

To give him my heart, my eyes, my whole life.

And if he asked me to cut my arm,

I would cut the two

And kiss the knife

I'll put it under my pillow

And his steps I will follow

Because he's my spirit, he is a part of me,

No, no . . . he is the whole of me

No, no . . . he is more than me

I am the part

I am the smallest part

I am? ? . . .I wish I can say I am his heart!

I am a drop of blood

I am the pain if he was cut

I am the sorrow of his heart

I am. . .

I am all what is out

I never been inside

I am the tear

I am the fear

I am all what he wishes to leave

I am all what he denies

I am the stone on which he steps to rise

I am nothing but a tool

I am his play's fool

Who goes out with "nothing"

I am the only who lose

I am the no-petal-rose

I am the dark star

I am the tire of his car

I am the carbon in his pencil

I am the full of dust book over his shelf

I am the black side of his self

I am all but nothing

I am the last choice

I am the husky voice

I am . . . what am I?

Tell me dear

Before I die?

What do you want me to say

After all what you said

What do you want me to read

After all what you read

Do you want me to cry

For you I would try

And if I couldn’t

If I didn’t

Find a tear

Just remember

I am your friend and you will find

Some one cares

Some one who dares

Someone who wouldn't

Exchange you with ten

Like her you are jealous from

And your day will soon come.

I wish that my friend

I wish I can stop being rend

I wish I can stop breathing his cigarette smoke

I wish I can be "me" again

I wish I can return

I wish I can find something to forget

I wish I can not regret

I wish I can stop the tear

I wish I can kill the fear

I wish I can hear

Any sound without remembering him!

That one who does not me know

That one who doesn’t me saw

That one who walks like a king

Between all the kings he is the only king

Between the men he is the only man

Between the hearts he is the only heart

Between the hopes he is the only wish. . .

I wish. . .

I wish to die

I wish I would be his princess

But how

What prevents me?

I cannot even try

My heart is dry

I know that he is busy

Between the books he will me burry

I know that he is the bachelor man

Even when he marry

He will not marry me, or any other woman

He will marry a book, a paper, a pencil, a heart which is not mine

Absolutely it won't be mine!!!!

So? Why am I still thinking about him?

Why am I still writing his name

Why with each drop of rain

I wish that he would remember me, think about me , write my name?

How can I a stop that?

How can I stop that??

Answer 1

Yep, it's me again.  I'm serious, it sounds like a story!  That's good, though, because it's actually a poem.  I can tell that you paid special attention to the number of syllables that you used in your lines - I liked it - nice job:)