Is my first poem good? give me some thoughts?

Question

Here I sit

and still I see that vision in my mind

these thoughts i think

the sights I see

all bundled and broken hearted

my heart is remembering

what my eyes couldn't believe

this Angel

from across the sea

the beauty I perceived

yet here im sitting

and wondering what I would say

if I could speak

if she could hear

The words I would convey

im tired of sitting

I may be quitting ,

I think im giving in

too hard it is

to show what I

am feeling from within

Answer 1

i love it. it flows and is easy to read.

"my heart is remembering

what my eyes couldn't believe"

really really beautiful!!

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Answer 2

I like it. It's really good for a first poem. It has nice flow and I like it's rhyme scheme.  

Answer 3

u are very good . keep on going